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i. rivers are stronger than oceans despite their size
they tumble through sharp mountains 
but they never, ever stop

ii. i can rush and pick up sediments 
and disperse them where i wish





iii. i'm lying -
i knew you saw it anyway,
there's seaweed in my fingernails
and salt on my breath




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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-07-30
tell a lie by ~ellathepirate is composed of beautiful language and vivid imagery. ( Suggested by skygazing and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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anobrain Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
thank you so much :glomp::heart:
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
you are so very welcome! :)
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful. A subtle beauty really makes this piece stand out from the rest. Well done, hun. :heart:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
thank you dear :aww::heart:
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome. :heart:
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
ah this poem is so amazing. i'm honestly speechless. i have nothing to say.
just, wow.

congratulations of the Daily Deviation. it is well deserved. :heart:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
thank you so so much :glomp::heart:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*blinks*
I

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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
:heart:
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MissStar489 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so sorry, but I may be on of the few people who does not fully understand this.
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
don't be sorry haha, poetry isn't just expected to be understood, and sometimes it doesn't really have to be. but i suppose you're curious, so i'll explain it:
basically, stanza one is implying that rivers are stronger than oceans: although oceans are vast, they just stay still. sure, there are rough waves, but they are - essentially - just a pool of water.
rivers, however, never stop moving, they never stop flowing even though they get shoved over rocks and and pick up dirt and just have a hard time, really. 
then, in stanza two, the character is metaphorically comparing themself to a river, saying that they are strong and even though horrible things get thrown at them, they just go with the flow and ride out with it and then eventually let go. 
stanza three uses imagery that suggests the character is really an ocean.

the prompt of this piece was the title, tell a lie: this character is lying about their emotional strength and how much they can handle.
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MissStar489 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh. Well now it all makes sense! No wonder you go a DD!
I thank you for explaining this. *bows*
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
thank you, haha, and you are most welcome. :glomp:
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MissStar489 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think I kind of do but I'm still confused xD
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Antvak Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Professional
I agree with you.. even the connection between all 3!
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The-Story-Spinner Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful! It makes me sad, and I'm not really sure why.

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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
thank you :heart:
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100percentgeek Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
Love it. It is beautiful. Truly. Congrats on the DDLove Heart Clap 
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
thank you so much :glomp::heart:
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
thank you! :heart:
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Schneefuechsin Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you :huggle:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013   Writer
The last stanza is really just what makes this poem amazingly beautiful. :heart: 

What a well-deserved DD! :clap:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you so much :love::heart:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013   Writer
you're most welcome! :hug:
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing! Congrats on the DD~
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you, my lovely! :heart:
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shakes8 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Student General Artist
That's fantastic. I love it.
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you so much :tighthug:
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shakes8 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome! You killed me...
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you, sweetie! you too :heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure, thank you :happybounce:
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AbbyMeyer Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
I love the last stanza particularly. :)
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you!
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Savaliste Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
:wave:CONGRATZ ON THE AWESOME DAILY DEVIATION! :peace:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you :huggle::heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
:heart:
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
'i'm lying -
i knew you saw it anyway,
there's seaweed in my fingernails
and salt on my breath'


I have added this piece to my favourites, previously, but I never commented to tell you why. I absolutely love this part, it just jumps out at me. You did a wonderful job with the prompt, and the way you have written this piece, whilst it is short, is both captivating and incredible to read.

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anobrain Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
thank you, my dear. :tighthug::heart:
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